Positive E-Cigarette Article

[Kent C]

Well done! Two comments.


I know you're just editing but I'll reiterate what I wrote in my edit:

"Many of them have welcomed recent news of the FDA ban on certain electronic cigarette brands, due to safety concerns."

The word 'the' in 'the FDA ban' indicates there is a ban, when there is not. And this is factually false. There is no ban. The last word from official FDA news releases was on July 22 and it was a warning.

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"Many of the non-smoking advocates may welcome an FDA ban on electronic cigarettes, after the FDA issued a warning in a July 22, 2009 news release."

Another questionable statement:
"One of the most appealing aspects of the device is that the liquids are available in many dosages of nicotine, from 55mg to 0mg."

There are liquids that run from, now, 75mg to 0mg but regular flavored ejuices are in the 0 -36mg range. And then unflavored juices above 36 are used 'for mixing only'. I see no reason to include any above 36 when you are speaking of 'the device' that will be using the juice. Plus the fact that some know that a 60mg dose can be problematic might think 55mg!! when in fact, with the exception of a few individuals, most vapers according to the recent unscientific poll here are well below 36, with 24 being the most but as an aggregate, more are below even that.

 

[virgingoods]

This is really great. A couple of things caught my eye that I didn't see mentioned yet (sorry if I just missed them); here we go:

Using quotation marks around smoking terms, as well as the use of the words "often consider", and (further along) the word "perception", in the sentences quoted below might suggest to a quick-and-dirty reader (of which there are many, sometimes including myself) that there is some doubt as to whether PV users are actually smoking. I am sure if you agree you might prefer to amend it yourself, but since you asked for suggestions, here they are (deletions in brackets, and insertions underlined).

[Vapers often consider themselves "smoke-free" or "non-smokers" because they have broken away from actual "smoking" and most of the negative aspects of tobacco cigarettes.] "Vapers" who no longer use ordinary tobacco cigarettes are often proud or relieved because they have broken away from actual smoking and most of the negative aspects of using cigarettes.

[The perception of personal vaporizer users that they are no longer smoking is one that is difficult for non-smokers and smoke-free advocates to understand.] The sense of accomplishment felt by those who have successfully stopped smoking with the help of these devices, which convincingly mimic smoke-producing cigarettes, has proven difficult for non-smokers and smoke-free advocates to understand.

Further on, you might want to ensure the reader understands that vapor and smoke are completely different things (a couple of minor edits also):
"Aside from putting electronic cigarette users back into the toxic cloud produced by tobacco smoke, personal vaporizer users point out that their vapor doesn’t behave in the same manner as cigarette smoke. Vapor is not produced by combustion, and bears little or no resemblance to smoke beyond its initial appearance. The vapor doesn’t appear to travel more than a couple of feet from the user. It also tends to [dissapate quicker] dissipate more quickly than smoke, making it fairly undetectable and unobtrusive for those nearby, so presenting the two as the same thing is misleading.

Thank you; again, this is really good.

 

[Debbie Lee]

I just pmed you hope you can use it, and thanks so much for doing this I'm sure I am not alone when I say we are so greatful you're doing this

 

[Sal]

I haven't posted much here but I agree with BigJimW ,
"Less money for big pharma and big tobacco and big government. Less smoke means less income."
That's the bottom line

Yep It ALL comes down to the ol'l mighty Buck!


I love to use my pv and they can only have it when they pry it from my healthy,non-smoking not yellow tarred fingertip hands

 

[Sal]

Wow, glad to see that there are people that can really put in words what Everyone NEEDS to know about this. Nice Job Everyone!

I Personally have smoked for 30 yrs -I'm 49 and bought a Titan 510 45 day's ago and have not looked back since - My wife and I both did it at the same time, She has also smoked for 30 yrs
--Right then and there WE stopped smoking real cigarettes and have had no urge to go back!!

I'm actually TOBACCO FREE for the first time in my life -- and I feel GREAT about it -- I can breath , smell, taste better -- the same as everyone else have said before in here and on every other forum I have visited!!!! I am so glad that I found this.

 

[BigJimW]

Any status on this? This release is too large for PRLog to release. It needs to be at least a two parter. Most press releases are under 8000 characters. This one is over 15,000 characters.

I put it in the pressroom, but will release it to prweb and i-wire when ready. Heres what it will look like formatted

Moonport Productions Pressroom 1 - Negative Reactions Mystify Electronic Cigarette Users

 

[kristin]

Hi All!

I'm so sorry I've been MIA - I made a major move last Monday and I have been so busy getting situated in a whole new city - there were so many details to address and I just didn't have any time to get online. In addition, I didn't get my new internet access until Friday!

Now I'm back and I'm working on going through the dozens and dozens of recommendations for the article. (Thank you all for your input!) It should be ready to go later this week.

If it gets broken into a 2 part article, how should I go about that? If I was a journalist with a newspaper, I could see it working as a feature, but I am not affiliated with any newspaper or magazine. Any suggestions?

 

[kristin]

Well done! Two comments.


I know you're just editing but I'll reiterate what I wrote in my edit:

"Many of them have welcomed recent news of the FDA ban on certain electronic cigarette brands, due to safety concerns."

The word 'the' in 'the FDA ban' indicates there is a ban, when there is not. And this is factually false. There is no ban. The last word from official FDA news releases was on July 22 and it was a warning.

Press Announcements

Suggest:

"Many of the non-smoking advocates may welcome an FDA ban on electronic cigarettes, after the FDA issued a warning in a July 22, 2009 news release."

Another questionable statement:
"One of the most appealing aspects of the device is that the liquids are available in many dosages of nicotine, from 55mg to 0mg."

There are liquids that run from, now, 75mg to 0mg but regular flavored ejuices are in the 0 -36mg range. And then unflavored juices above 36 are used 'for mixing only'. I see no reason to include any above 36 when you are speaking of 'the device' that will be using the juice. Plus the fact that some know that a 60mg dose can be problematic might think 55mg!! when in fact, with the exception of a few individuals, most vapers according to the recent unscientific poll here are well below 36, with 24 being the most but as an aggregate, more are below even that.

I'm a bit confused on this. If there is no ban, who is stopping the e-cigs from coming into the country and under what authority?

 

[kristin]

Another questionable statement:
"One of the most appealing aspects of the device is that the liquids are available in many dosages of nicotine, from 55mg to 0mg."

Also, I don't believe I have this statement in the article? Where are your reading this?

 

[Kent C]

I'm a bit confused on this. If there is no ban, who is stopping the e-cigs from coming into the country and under what authority?

I don't know if that's the case. We are getting ecigs into the country. If you mean why isn't anyone manufacturing them, I don't know the answer to that, but there is no FDA ban on it and I searched the FDA site for it and only came up with the warning issued July 22. Do you have a source for your original statement? That would help clear up the issue.

 

[Kent C]

Also, I don't believe I have this statement in the article? Where are your reading this?

It wasn't. I was referrring to the post right before mine from 'span' who did an extensive edit - a pretty good one, imo, except for the two points mentioned. I don't know why put in the 55mg and I was asking him 'why', when that isn't an amount that is vaped, but only used in mixing, etc. etc.

 

[kristin]

I don't know if that's the case. We are getting ecigs into the country. If you mean why isn't anyone manufacturing them, I don't know the answer to that, but there is no FDA ban on it and I searched the FDA site for it and only came up with the warning issued July 22. Do you have a source for your original statement? That would help clear up the issue.

I read it in posts here (by suppliers) that customs was holding up shipments.

 

[kristin]

OK, final draft is done!

LINK: http://www.e-cigarette-forum.com/forum/e-cigarette-news/36314-final-draft-completed.html

Please go to that thread and give me places to publish!!

 

[Kent C]

I read it in posts here (by suppliers) that customs was holding up shipments.

Then for the article I'd state it as that rather than an outright ban. I read where customs seems to hold shipments over a period of time but then has released them, but if you have specifics on confiscation then reporting the particulars on that would be more newsworthy in the light that they have not specifically banned the product. Someone is acting on their own without authority and that's newsworthy.