A Love Poem. I really, really hate writing them, but occasionally I am forced to since poetry class will often assign you something. I took a look at this one and amended it, which is actually a good sign, since if I start doing that I am gearing up to start Editing Again (you kinda gotta rest in between, but not
forever). So I had fun "fixing" it although there's still something wrong with it, perhaps the ending, IDK. It has been my observation that sometimes things I hate other people like but MAN, love poetry has just been done to death. This one is more about the evolution of trust in marriage I think.
Since my elbow is still messed up, I'm posting it, and probably starting the final edit later... Even if it's reluctant and I don't get far, I know it will Pick Up. LOL. Critiques welcomed
Love Poem
My husband became my solid ground, having
crept all around those most guarded
enemy lines; he was a spy who viewed from far away
what lay ahead, my ready-marshalled armament defenses
and he, who in the still of night breached the interior, causing
misinformation and dissemination until at last my castle
fell, with no lives lost as it crumbled. No
not even me; he did not touch a single
hair upon my head.
For I was no Rapunzel singing and I would
never lower one precious silken strand
but would shave them off mistrustfully
instead, so fortunate was I in my patient, loving
observer who with his telescopes, carrier pigeons and
secret signs, his passwords, armies of guard dogs
and wolves barred my way and
with his own scarred hands he built a ladder
to invite me down, when startled I ran to the very
top of the keep and opened each window
preparing to fly straight aloft;
frozen and afraid, I would not have
touched that flow of molten earth beneath
me for any useless, reckless prince, all
gilded over with lies. But my husband
who for years has laid
his snares and spread glorious wares:
flowers and fruits from his own precincts
placing before me all his love and lowering
his marred and broken body that allowed
my ever frightened flighty feet to run across
in safety. So, he slowly coaxed me down
through
sheer perseverance, hearing my blown
engines, my wings ripped off by rushing air
my radar jammed, my rudder useless and compass
dead, into a most gentle
emergency landing…. I crashed
down into his arms.
For my husband is my ground and
does not fear my storms or lightning, just
my parting.
But this is no longer possible for I am bound
by each gilded, glossy
thread connecting us
within an infinity pattern, a God figure, a sideways geometric
precisely drawn silver eight, we are adjoined
by neck, spine, heart, soul, body and secret.
My husband who would never raise himself up
by releasing a single breath across my face in violence
and he can see at last revealed, a poor sinner and a patient spinner
weaving veils around him
wings still slightly crooked but strengthening enough
to soar, not unlike a butterfly around him or a moth
to flame,
without a single danger brought to mind
as my husband
is my perfect human love
forever.
And now together we linger, tending to our own
grounds—earth, wind, air, weather, fire and water—
we are plant-growing, child-rearing and
sons and daughters of a most loving and
merciful God, who names us, as
He names us all, “My Eve,
My Adam, beloveds—come back
to Me now in haste—and
raise yourselves up
through sacrifices for each other
be My sons and daughters as I wait in silent patience
and enter Heaven, for it is
exactly
Here and Now.
The sunlight, your family together and the
love that glows each morning
upon your horizon at
the break of day.”
Anna